Friday, August 01, 2014

My Mum character writing

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WALT describe a character by showing, not telling.
I must remember to: Show not Tell
Paragraph One - In your first paragraph, describe this person - how the character looks, sounds, smells.  This is the physical description. Show, don’t tell.  Be specific.
Paragraph Two - In your second paragraph, you deal with behaviour - how a character speaks and acts.  What makes this person unique - a laugh, a way of talking, a way of moving
Paragraph Three - In your third paragraph, you will deal with reputation.  Make the character come alive.  Show, don’t tell
Paragraph Four - In your fourth paragraph, describe the characters environment and belongings.
              

Begin your writing here:                                       My Mum

“Shhh” I’m watching TV Nikki!  When I hear that I can not say a word  and if I do I get growled but not a big growl.  My mum is really funny, helpful, caring and  loves to sing.   She loves her job at the hospital, and everyday when she is home and I’m there she has a big fat smile on her face.   If you were to find my mum walking down a road you would not look for a fat, short, short haired and brown eyed lady.

When mum acts she has this really funny voice and she makes me laugh for a  really long time  and that sometimes makes my tummy hurt. My mum has a funny laugh but it only happens sometimes when something is really really funny.  Mum has a lot of voices so like when she is really really angry she shouts, when she is happy she has a nice voice and when she is normal she has a normal voice.
 
My Mum gives me a lot of presents, she always surprises me, helps me, buys me stuff and take me places.Mum loves her job, she works at the Hastings hospital. She works  upstairs past a couple of floors in the heart place. Mum works in the hospital as a nurse, she has a white uniform black pants or skirt and whatever shoes except high heels (of course).       

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She sits there holding her  phone BEEP BEEP, another message. “Mum can you please come off the phone” OK Nikki just let me finish this level oh OK and she sat there finishing her level of candy crush.  My mum is always playing candy crush on the computer or her new phone which is a Samsung S5.  I love my Mum.